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Ok, I actually did enjoy the video. The way you interacted and talked with the first two spectators was very good. You seemed very natural and it seemed like you knew what to say and how to say it. Introducing yourself and shaking hands is always the best way to go.
Now for some criticism and advice:
I admire your dedication to do something like this. Please take this advice into account. I made a video like this a few months ago. It's been removed from Youtube, but if you want to see it just drop me a PM.
Good luck with your next episode!
Edit: One thing I forgot. STOP THOSE ANNOYING HAND GESTURES!
Now for some criticism and advice:
- What was with all of that, "Heeeee, heeeee, heeee." You sounded like you were having an asthma attack
- The camera quality was awful, if you want a series you need to get a better camera. I noticed that you were using two cameras. I recommend that you sell those two cameras on eBay, and buy one HD camera. When you were doing thread I could barely see the thread.
- All those camera cuts during effects were extremely annoying. Just use one good camera.
- Give credit to the artists who supplied the music. Give the artist and title during the ending credits.
- Also give credit to your crew
- Give credit to the artists who created the effects that you performed. Do NOT give the effect name, but definitely give the artist name
- Did other peope pay you to advertise their channels? I think that's actually a good idea personally.
- Ok so Criss, I mean Lamont, one final piece of advice. STOP TRYING TO BE CRISS ANGEL! I know you enjoy his magic and I don't have a problem with that. Just stop trying to be like him. Develop your own character.
I admire your dedication to do something like this. Please take this advice into account. I made a video like this a few months ago. It's been removed from Youtube, but if you want to see it just drop me a PM.
Good luck with your next episode!
Edit: One thing I forgot. STOP THOSE ANNOYING HAND GESTURES!
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I love, absolutely love, that you are going out to real people and performing for them. That takes guts that alot of people do not have. I applaud you for that.
However I am not a fan of your video and presenting style. I am also not a fan of Criss Angel either and your style is similiar. Nothing wrong with it, just not a fan. I think thats why when I see you do the hand thing to the camera, I have to convince myself to keep watching. Maybe try taking some of that down a notch.
I will not insult you or your videos, because thats not right, and it is not what I am trying to do. Please do not misunderstand me as so. But I mean whats with the "coming up" or the advertisements. Its a youtube video, not a television special. Also I think your videos could be edited better, sometimes I hear cues that you are giving to your cameraperson that could easily be edited out. It will make your videos look alot better.
I think on your magic itself, you are good at it. I think you need a little more work with presentation and how to present outside of just 5 seconds of breathing hard before the finale. Work on developing better patter.
I like hearing music with the magic, but only in the background. Score your videos, don't just drowned them in a song. You make great song choices, and edit them well as far as timing goes, but I think that your videos will get a better reaction out of the video viewing spectator if they have some spectators in the video who they can hear and identify with their reactions. Notice how when performing a trick, some spectators will stay quiet until one of them bursts into laughter or screaming then they all will laugh and scream? It is the same when someone sees a video. Don't cover this up with music.
Please do not take any of this as insults. I like what you are doing, but thought maybe my 2 cents could help. Keep it up.
However I am not a fan of your video and presenting style. I am also not a fan of Criss Angel either and your style is similiar. Nothing wrong with it, just not a fan. I think thats why when I see you do the hand thing to the camera, I have to convince myself to keep watching. Maybe try taking some of that down a notch.
I will not insult you or your videos, because thats not right, and it is not what I am trying to do. Please do not misunderstand me as so. But I mean whats with the "coming up" or the advertisements. Its a youtube video, not a television special. Also I think your videos could be edited better, sometimes I hear cues that you are giving to your cameraperson that could easily be edited out. It will make your videos look alot better.
I think on your magic itself, you are good at it. I think you need a little more work with presentation and how to present outside of just 5 seconds of breathing hard before the finale. Work on developing better patter.
I like hearing music with the magic, but only in the background. Score your videos, don't just drowned them in a song. You make great song choices, and edit them well as far as timing goes, but I think that your videos will get a better reaction out of the video viewing spectator if they have some spectators in the video who they can hear and identify with their reactions. Notice how when performing a trick, some spectators will stay quiet until one of them bursts into laughter or screaming then they all will laugh and scream? It is the same when someone sees a video. Don't cover this up with music.
Please do not take any of this as insults. I like what you are doing, but thought maybe my 2 cents could help. Keep it up.
I stopped watching because it was so bad. I agree with DaveG above, plus oodles more things I noticed. The main thing that bothered me was you apparent crush/obsession with Criss Angel. It was creepy in a way, and really annoying that you tried so hard to imitate him.
I disagree. I did find the video somewhat entertaining. There were a lot of things wrong with it, and there's a ridiculously huge amount of room for improvement. I think you guys are being a little harsh.
Way to show support Adjones!
Seriously, cool vid. Work on some of the things mentioned above, but keep going. You'll get there.
Exactly, some of you guys are being a little overly-harsh. Keep trying man, you've got potential.
i like the video alot, i agree with daveyG; they are being very harsh. it takes alot of guts to perform street magic, and you did great. one thing to try to stop is the ending thing with your hands. overall, great job, keep it up
I agree with your disagreement. We could all use improvement, and I think everyone will agree that it sucks when you put work into something and all you get back is nothing but criticism, non constructive criticism at that. So it isn't perfect, well I think you will all agree that he still put a good amount of effort and deserves some props for that. It at least made my day a little better so see that he was putting some smiles on some faces rather than just some cards on a bed in front of a webcam with his crotch as the backdrop and his basketball shorts as stage curtains.
There was just soooo much about it I didn't like. First off, ENOUGH WITH THE CRISS ANGLE (i mean angel) STUFF. You use his tricks, his patter and his music.
2. You REALLY need to work on your patter. For example, why use a deck of cards for pressure when you could of used their cell phone. They didn't really look as impressed as they should have.
3. AND PLEASE FOR THE LOVE OF GOD NO MORE CREEPY BREATHING. It's just weird and it makes the spectator feel really awkward when you make noises like that.
4. Work on the camera editing. You really don't need two cameras jumping back and forth. AND YOU DON'T NEED A CONTINUOUS SHOT SUBTITLE. I wonder where you got that from. Oh wait Criss Angel does that for EVERYONE OF HIS EFFING TRICKS!!!
5. Please stop with the creepy hand sign after every effect.
-Charlie
2. You REALLY need to work on your patter. For example, why use a deck of cards for pressure when you could of used their cell phone. They didn't really look as impressed as they should have.
3. AND PLEASE FOR THE LOVE OF GOD NO MORE CREEPY BREATHING. It's just weird and it makes the spectator feel really awkward when you make noises like that.
4. Work on the camera editing. You really don't need two cameras jumping back and forth. AND YOU DON'T NEED A CONTINUOUS SHOT SUBTITLE. I wonder where you got that from. Oh wait Criss Angel does that for EVERYONE OF HIS EFFING TRICKS!!!
5. Please stop with the creepy hand sign after every effect.
-Charlie
Your videos present you as something new and edgy but your performance doesnt add up to the promise.
You do the same,tired god-mage there is no drama,nothing to actually interest laymen in the magic other than "look what I can do". And that is the performance style of a ton of people.
The sounds you make when your doing the "magic" sounds over-the-top and acted.If you want to do that,make it seem natural and subtle.Pressure didnt make sense because you hardly said anything and rushed it. The audience had no reaction,and if it was stunned silence we didnt see it because of the camera. But when the camera was on them it looked like they had no clue what was going on.And not in a good way.
I do like that you at least introduce yourself properly.
You do the same,tired god-mage there is no drama,nothing to actually interest laymen in the magic other than "look what I can do". And that is the performance style of a ton of people.
The sounds you make when your doing the "magic" sounds over-the-top and acted.If you want to do that,make it seem natural and subtle.Pressure didnt make sense because you hardly said anything and rushed it. The audience had no reaction,and if it was stunned silence we didnt see it because of the camera. But when the camera was on them it looked like they had no clue what was going on.And not in a good way.
I do like that you at least introduce yourself properly.
I watched your video, and I've got my usual list of assorted notes for you.
1) Wardrobe! You need a performance costume that will set you aside from everyone else you perform for. You blend in WAY to much with the rest of the marks. Also, The jeans and T-shirt will scream David Blaine, an image you'll want to avoid. You want to become your own brand, and identity. Ditch the T-shirt and Jeans.
2) Lighting: Use better lighting. @1:10 you are way to dark.
3) Don't have the camera man answer you by shaking the camera yes or no like at 5:00. It is disorienting to the viewer.
4) Flash at 5:09. The silk doesn't lay flush against your hand and responds to movement like there is a stub of "something" held within it's folds. Tighten this up if you want people to actually buy this as "impromptu".
I don't know what the comment about using Criss Angel's music was about. I didn't recall hearing one note of Mind Freak in your video. As for your presentation style: I've said before that it mirrors that of Criss's. You're going to catch a lot of flack for that while you explore and find yourself in magic. Sooner or later you'll develop your own presentation style and your brand "Destiny" will become an entity unto itself. Until then, keep experimenting. Try different styles, try different presentations. Watch as much TV magic as you can find for inspiration and research. This thing just takes time.
1) Wardrobe! You need a performance costume that will set you aside from everyone else you perform for. You blend in WAY to much with the rest of the marks. Also, The jeans and T-shirt will scream David Blaine, an image you'll want to avoid. You want to become your own brand, and identity. Ditch the T-shirt and Jeans.
2) Lighting: Use better lighting. @1:10 you are way to dark.
3) Don't have the camera man answer you by shaking the camera yes or no like at 5:00. It is disorienting to the viewer.
4) Flash at 5:09. The silk doesn't lay flush against your hand and responds to movement like there is a stub of "something" held within it's folds. Tighten this up if you want people to actually buy this as "impromptu".
I don't know what the comment about using Criss Angel's music was about. I didn't recall hearing one note of Mind Freak in your video. As for your presentation style: I've said before that it mirrors that of Criss's. You're going to catch a lot of flack for that while you explore and find yourself in magic. Sooner or later you'll develop your own presentation style and your brand "Destiny" will become an entity unto itself. Until then, keep experimenting. Try different styles, try different presentations. Watch as much TV magic as you can find for inspiration and research. This thing just takes time.