Ambitious card performance

[cleanentertainer]

let me know what you think.(still working on my pass)
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9VUJRVXOXlU

 

[eostresh]

Your tilt also needs a bit of practice as well as catching breaks. It is under 2 minutes, so it isn't excessively long. That is a good thing. But structurally there is a build but no climax. I really believe that ACRs usually demand a card to impossible location(ie. CTW) or some other sufficiently impressive effect, otherwise it is just like a broken record.

 

[cleanentertainer]

thanks ill take your advice into consideration