Hey,
Could you guys give me some feedback on this routine?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=i4T4-yrqx3Y
Could you guys give me some feedback on this routine?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=i4T4-yrqx3Y
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Feedback!
- Thread starter MagicPros
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Hmm...
Honestly, I felt it quite boring to watch. I think you almost flashed once at around 0:48 from the angle the camera was, but to a spectator I guess it would be ok. I also think you should speed up the trick and make the handling more smoother, some of it seemed a little choppy. A more flashy magical gesture, or, letting it "settle" in a spectators closed hands would be better as appose to just covering up the whole cards, because it can be fishy at some points.
I hope that this helps you.
Keep up the good work.
Cheers,
-Sanj
Honestly, I felt it quite boring to watch. I think you almost flashed once at around 0:48 from the angle the camera was, but to a spectator I guess it would be ok. I also think you should speed up the trick and make the handling more smoother, some of it seemed a little choppy. A more flashy magical gesture, or, letting it "settle" in a spectators closed hands would be better as appose to just covering up the whole cards, because it can be fishy at some points.
I hope that this helps you.
Keep up the good work.
Cheers,
-Sanj
Sorry man, but it needs some work. You have the concept but work on making it fluid. It seems like you had to think about every move before you did it. That makes for a slow choppy performance, and patter. Another thing is that showing some of the faces, and not the others makes me really suspicious of what you are doing. Either show all of them, or none of them and it will be more convincing.
Since you are asking for feedback – here are the things I picked up on that can be changed to improve your effect.
- Don’t tell me you are placing the cards down, I can see that.
- Showing all the cards, but one, looks very suspicious and leads me to believe that card wasn’t the colour that “I assumed”, that I didn’t see that card for a reason...the reason is the method.
- To the point above, why show them again...after showing them once – overkill
- Your patter is instructional; it makes the trick have no hook or feeling – think about why they separate.
The second phase, it take you too long to get your breaks. Also, there was no reason for them to be spread; you have to mimic spreading them – as per the original handling. The method was very obvious, because of the way you handled the card, the method is good – so, it’s your error.
The last line, saying you “lied” and telling the audience that we were dumb enough to “but it”, is a horrible presentational idea, as Oil and Water really can’t mix...and you insult the audience and yourself in the same line.
The most exciting part of your video was the intro...and even that was a lot of build up for a poorly done effect.
Sorry bro, not trying to be mean – but you need to work on that a bit more before it sees light of day.
Look forward to the improvement.
- Don’t tell me you are placing the cards down, I can see that.
- Showing all the cards, but one, looks very suspicious and leads me to believe that card wasn’t the colour that “I assumed”, that I didn’t see that card for a reason...the reason is the method.
- To the point above, why show them again...after showing them once – overkill
- Your patter is instructional; it makes the trick have no hook or feeling – think about why they separate.
The second phase, it take you too long to get your breaks. Also, there was no reason for them to be spread; you have to mimic spreading them – as per the original handling. The method was very obvious, because of the way you handled the card, the method is good – so, it’s your error.
The last line, saying you “lied” and telling the audience that we were dumb enough to “but it”, is a horrible presentational idea, as Oil and Water really can’t mix...and you insult the audience and yourself in the same line.
The most exciting part of your video was the intro...and even that was a lot of build up for a poorly done effect.
Sorry bro, not trying to be mean – but you need to work on that a bit more before it sees light of day.
Look forward to the improvement.
I agree with everyone else, this needs a lot of work. Your sleight of hand looks so awkward, there's just no way to justify the movements your doing, it looks suspicious, anybody watching will be able to tell that your doing something even if they don't know exactly what.
Watch videos of some pros such as Dan and Dave and watch how they handle the cards, all their actions are very natural and justified. This is what you should aim for.
Watch videos of some pros such as Dan and Dave and watch how they handle the cards, all their actions are very natural and justified. This is what you should aim for.