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My Comedy Card Routine
- Thread starter Michael Kras
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I think you had plenty of good comedy in there which is better than cracking some lame-ass joke every two seconds and that way you can still preserve that moment of omgwtfbbq without it taking a seat behind comedy.
The only thing i think you need to work on is how you were tripping over your words and had to pause and take breathes. This happens to me sometimes and what you and i both have to realize is that you have their full attention and you don't need to conform to what they want just say what you have to say and don't worry about what the spectators think.
Also recapping is unnecessary if a person cant remember what you did 30 seconds ago they probably have Alzheimers and a severe case of it.
The only thing i think you need to work on is how you were tripping over your words and had to pause and take breathes. This happens to me sometimes and what you and i both have to realize is that you have their full attention and you don't need to conform to what they want just say what you have to say and don't worry about what the spectators think.
Also recapping is unnecessary if a person cant remember what you did 30 seconds ago they probably have Alzheimers and a severe case of it.
Michael:
Let me start by saying that I wouldn't be doing this if I didn't think that you and others can learn from it. I could have easily just have typed "good job man!"
I have three questions: 1) Did you take the time to write down the patter? and 2) How many times have you rehearsed the routine, including patter, by yourself? I'm guessing the answers are no and none.
That leads me to: 3) How can anyone perform something they haven't scripted and rehearsed?
We all get to think we are better than others and that the rules don't apply. We think that we can pull together something at the last minute and pull it off without rehearsing. It can be done, but it can't be done well. Script, Practice, Rehearse, Perform.
What I was trying to convey is that you have a personality but there was nothing in your performance that reflected it. The only things you said that were not a description of what was happening was the "preferable female" comment at the beginning, the "was it good for you?" comment right before the reveal and the "sexy music" comment during the recap. Everything else you said was "narrating" your action.
I'll give you credit for using the blank cards and the music. You've started to make the routine yours. But even with the addition of those two ideas, your dialogue is barely more than narration.
You have a great personality and presence in your other videos. However, your personality and presence is too big for a simple Youtube video. You need to bring that personality on stage where it would be the right size.
Saying "this is new" is an excuse. The script is something that should have been done before the first performance, especially for a stage performance. Once you write something, I'd be glad to review it and give you my comments and feedback.
I can't see how a well scripted routine could be overdone. The key with a script, especially comedy, is to perform it in a way that makes it seem spontaneous. A script wouldn't have made it any longer or more in depth. Instead, it would have made what you said more interesting.
My point is that they could have enjoyed it MORE.
How many laughs do you think he got in his five minute performance?
Let's count - A half laugh at his "preferably female" comment, a laugh that was caused by the spectator's reaction to his bite down comment (they weren't laughing at his comment but her reaction), a laugh when he put it between his teeth and talking, a laugh at the spectator's reaction when he said "we'll see if there is any magic between us"; a laugh when he put on the music, a half laugh when he asked "was it good for you?" and a laugh when he referred to the music as "sexy music." That's four laughs for him and two for the spectator's reaction.
Even if we give him full credit, that is six laughs in five minutes -- any comedian who gets that number of laughs would not be asked back (an average comedian can get 4 to 6 laughs PER MINUTE).
The better thing is to have a script that the spectators want to hear.
Let me start by saying that I wouldn't be doing this if I didn't think that you and others can learn from it. I could have easily just have typed "good job man!"
I have three questions: 1) Did you take the time to write down the patter? and 2) How many times have you rehearsed the routine, including patter, by yourself? I'm guessing the answers are no and none.
That leads me to: 3) How can anyone perform something they haven't scripted and rehearsed?
We all get to think we are better than others and that the rules don't apply. We think that we can pull together something at the last minute and pull it off without rehearsing. It can be done, but it can't be done well. Script, Practice, Rehearse, Perform.
What I was trying to convey is that you have a personality but there was nothing in your performance that reflected it. The only things you said that were not a description of what was happening was the "preferable female" comment at the beginning, the "was it good for you?" comment right before the reveal and the "sexy music" comment during the recap. Everything else you said was "narrating" your action.
I'll give you credit for using the blank cards and the music. You've started to make the routine yours. But even with the addition of those two ideas, your dialogue is barely more than narration.
You have a great personality and presence in your other videos. However, your personality and presence is too big for a simple Youtube video. You need to bring that personality on stage where it would be the right size.
Saying "this is new" is an excuse. The script is something that should have been done before the first performance, especially for a stage performance. Once you write something, I'd be glad to review it and give you my comments and feedback.
I can't see how a well scripted routine could be overdone. The key with a script, especially comedy, is to perform it in a way that makes it seem spontaneous. A script wouldn't have made it any longer or more in depth. Instead, it would have made what you said more interesting.
My point is that they could have enjoyed it MORE.
How many laughs do you think he got in his five minute performance?
Let's count - A half laugh at his "preferably female" comment, a laugh that was caused by the spectator's reaction to his bite down comment (they weren't laughing at his comment but her reaction), a laugh when he put it between his teeth and talking, a laugh at the spectator's reaction when he said "we'll see if there is any magic between us"; a laugh when he put on the music, a half laugh when he asked "was it good for you?" and a laugh when he referred to the music as "sexy music." That's four laughs for him and two for the spectator's reaction.
Even if we give him full credit, that is six laughs in five minutes -- any comedian who gets that number of laughs would not be asked back (an average comedian can get 4 to 6 laughs PER MINUTE).
The better thing is to have a script that the spectators want to hear.
Despite the fact that some of these laughs are some I don't get directly, they have been planned by me. The few times I've done it, each spectator has their own way of reacting to the procedure. I do appreciate and agree with all of your points and advice, and as a man in theatre there's no doubt I'll be scripting this. But the audience did enjoy it as it was. And for an unfinished routine, that was a pleasing result.
@RealityOne, Thank you for both thorough responses. I know this wasn't my video, but I am working on my stage act now and you've helped, a lot!