ok i know my patter sucked but what do u want me to say give me some ideas?
Okay

, dude 60%-90% of the trick is presentation. I hate that modern DVD´s and such dont teach that. I cant find a single dvd where they concentrated on how to build a solid presentation.
Also i now hate having stock stuff and this is what i do. I practice the trick and get it down with no patter that means you basically have bare bones.
Strip everything you can to get it more bones than you can imagine.
And build everything from the ground up.
Think about all the movements you make, what style you want to do it in, make it fit your style. Make it fit you...
I dont have this so what i would do is this:
Barebones its this:
CardShown/Decked/DeckMoves/CardSlipsOut
This is a 5 minute thing, i have not worked on the final revealt part and im not going to because i dont have it. But here is something:
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Me: Hello, how your name Sarah, okay Sarah my name is Mikk. Have you ever seen the show tom and jerry?
Sarah: Yes i have, i love them.
Me: Looks like we have a fanatic on our hands

, nono im just joking, you probably dont have a room full of jerrys and toms and pajamas to go with them, like i do. Okay a little too much info there, hehe *looks very upset of what he just said*. Okay so the deal is that when i was little i watched them everyday, i literally woke up and watched tom and jerry. *calmly says* I loved life back them...Anyway, i actually learned English from them, at the age of six i could talk Enlglish more fluidly than my sister, who is 15 years older than me.
Now do you know the basic sequences that went on in the episodes?
Sarah: Alittle, i dont remember it very well.
Me: Well, its basically this. Jerry runs away from tom and every once in a while Tom gets Jerry. Now he makes alot of fuss to eat him correctly, he for instance makes a very tidy sandwich or takes a candle and a plate and on the plate is jerry with sauce and such.
Lets try to recreate that, are you in?
Is everybody else dying to see Tom and Jerry for the 6004 time?
Sarah: Im in...
Spectators: Clap
Me: Okay, i have here a deck of cards. Now i want you to imagine the deck being Tom, not yet we have to get Jerry first

. Pick a card, and write Jerry on it really big.
Sarah: in the middle?
Me: In the middle or on the side or wherever just write Jerry there so we could indentify him later.
Sarah: *writes* Here you go
Me: Thank you that was very helpful ( this is important because this ties you with the spectator. It makes them feel important)
Now, we have Tom&Jerry. I want you to imagine the deck being Tom and the card being Jerry. Now as i was saying every once in a while Tom gets Jerry...*you put the Jerry card in the middle*. Now i want you to help me out again and hold your finger on Tom for a moment. Now as soon as you let go Toms guard will be down and thats because Jerry gets away everytime. You can let go anytime you want, just lift your finger.
Sarah: *Lifts finger and the deck moves.* WOW....
Me: Jerrys half way away he needs to make the final jump, *tap the deck and the Jerry card flyes out* there he goes right back to his home. You saved him give her a round of applause.
The ending is as i said a bit strange and dosent give the full effect credit. The end must be the finalt straw where they hang on to, you want to make the magic be with you and the spec. The basic job is done now expand this and make it big and hard hitting.
Mikk